WK6: Defiant (3-1) vs Dominate (2-0) -- Dominate 7-0

e11even · 11-10-2014, 01:41 AM

Dominate- I liked this piece. It was pretty descriptive and I felt like I was watching a movie.
I just don't get why the protagonist had an epiphany after his beheading though. Tight drop for the bars alotted. Nice work.

Defiant- if this was about a soldier that killed his leader to take credit for ending the war, this badass. If not, its still good. I just think the story could've used a little less buildup and a more thorough ending, rather the conclusion crammed into the last two lines. Still was enjoyable though.

MVGT dom for a better written epic take on the topic.

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11-10-2014, 01:41 AM	#1
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Dominate- I liked this piece. It was pretty descriptive and I felt like I was watching a movie. I just don't get why the protagonist had an epiphany after his beheading though. Tight drop for the bars alotted. Nice work. Defiant- if this was about a soldier that killed his leader to take credit for ending the war, this badass. If not, its still good. I just think the story could've used a little less buildup and a more thorough ending, rather the conclusion crammed into the last two lines. Still was enjoyable though. MVGT dom for a better written epic take on the topic.