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Old 11-08-2014, 09:17 PM   #1
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Snap back to the tragedy
mention images in my rear view mirror you bitches' ll never see
Mic stand..catching a right hand
not punches but several daps..appreciation for sharing my raps
I have levels of conscience continuity
a distinct following while others mimic..I find a stream *(flow)
wasn't allow to speak..went against the grain
developed my own road..we are not the same
stay in the lane of..posting on a board/bored environment
while a select few..more complexed then whom "type" fire..but isn't firing
No need to iron it..the irony is admiring
continue to type shit..your talk does nothing *suggest* retirement
Double bag it bitch and skip that faggot shit
apply for a gym applicant..might help you attract a bitch
point dexter..wide imagination..time stretcher
doesnt fit in a crowd..head size might measure to his pint shy gestures
whose a bitch..bet all of Wayne's inheritance (Bruce, Bruce)
you wouldn't say shit..confusion"" doubt man-tits knows what a tool is
Viewing my music trying to compute shit
secretly amused with that I on the other hand actually do this
get on the mic..its a cake walk
just an impression. .no cakes involved..second thoughts of this bitch taking off
a race to the fridge you would win it
but recording bars like footage of prison might leave you winded
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Old 11-08-2014, 09:40 PM   #2
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When you have to explain your rap in your rap
I don't understand the sense in that
I have a shortened attention span due to your "mic presence"
and every other song you might mention
when you treat writers like they fallen out the loop
it leaves your verse feeling like you doubted you
tap into deeper psychological twists
and maybe Ill read another one of your scripts..

keep at it
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Old 11-08-2014, 09:43 PM   #3
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@Mr. J you are onto something here
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Old 11-08-2014, 09:47 PM   #4
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btw apply for a gym applicant

iron it. irony

its like u joined sum wack ass crew n ur all usin sum weak ass word association

like that mansyn guy

trash tbh. this AND that vid

not loonybin tho

hes ok
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Old 11-09-2014, 05:13 PM   #5
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Originally Posted by FLOW View Post
Snap back to the tragedy
mention images in my rear view mirror you bitches' ll never see
Mic stand..catching a right hand
not punches but several daps..appreciation for sharing my raps
I have levels of conscience continuity
a distinct following while others mimic..I find a stream *(flow)
wasn't allow to speak..went against the grain
developed my own road..we are not the same
stay in the lane of..posting on a board/bored environment
while a select few..more complexed then whom "type" fire..but isn't firing
*Complex
No need to iron it..the irony is admiring
This didn't make sense
continue to type shit..your talk does nothing *suggest* retirement
Again, this didn't make sense
Double bag it bitch and skip that faggot shit
apply for a gym applicant..might help you attract a bitch
You meant application...try not to force rhymes
point dexter..wide imagination..time stretcher
doesnt fit in a crowd..head size might measure to his pint shy gestures
whose a bitch..bet all of Wayne's inheritance (Bruce, Bruce)
you wouldn't say shit..confusion"" doubt man-tits knows what a tool is
Viewing my music trying to compute shit
secretly amused with that I on the other hand actually do this
get on the mic..its a cake walk
just an impression. .no cakes involved..second thoughts of this bitch taking off
a race to the fridge you would win it
but recording bars like footage of prison might leave you winded
As well as the parts that didn't make sense a lot of this was very basic when it came to rhyming, try and experiment with more complex schemes, it got a little more advanced towards the end, but could have been better.

Keep at it.
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