WK6: timeless (3-2) vs dead man (3-2) [dead man wins 5-0.]

[Witty]

Excuse the short vote.

Deadman - This was dope, I felt a few of the rhymes were a little off which isn't something I have come to expect from you. That takes nothing away from the writing though, excellent as usual, 'spongy wet like labia buds' was one of those lines I wish I had written. This to me was a little reminiscent of Lupe Fiasco's The Cool, which is one of my favourite songs so that was an added bonus lol not much to criticize, maybe a little rushed, rhymes weren't at your usual standard but still a very high standard, other than that dope piece my friend.

Timeless - I enjoyed some of the turn of phrases that you used within this piece, such as 'when the sun melts hearts I'll be the snowman holding ours', I thought that was cool. The flow was kind of wooden at times, it was hard to keep a rhythm throughout the piece and I do wish you had worked with the first two lines a little bit because they felt a little forced and it's always important to start strong, after that though the piece improved with each line and I really enjoyed the ending, cool piece man, you can definitely do better and have done in the past, but this was a nice read nonetheless.

Voting for Deadman.