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11-06-2014, 07:06 PM
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The Clown Prince
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The flow of the whole piece was on point for how you wrote it
seemed like someone could just rattle this off on an instrumental then it would end, I feel you should add more to a piece like this it adds a little more depth to what your tryna say...at least in my opinion otherwise I enjoyed what you put together, keep writing
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