RELIGION 2.0

Zen · 04-08-2013, 01:55 PM

Holy shit Split. This was fuckin nice man no lie. If you wanna give my honest opinion on this, for some reason as I was reading this I kept thinking back to the book 1984. Idk why but I'm thinking the voice reminded me of Winston from the book. But I digress...
But in reading this I found that I love your word choices you use. For example:

But effects of pedantic prose and holiest tomes expands, torn by our fiddling hands,
^^^That line really stood out for me when it comes to your word choice. I fuckin love that line.

The entire last stanza is quoteable but instead of doing that I'll just it was fuckin ill man. Easily the best work I've seen from you Split. Props.

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04-08-2013, 01:55 PM	#1
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Holy shit Split. This was fuckin nice man no lie. If you wanna give my honest opinion on this, for some reason as I was reading this I kept thinking back to the book 1984. Idk why but I'm thinking the voice reminded me of Winston from the book. But I digress... But in reading this I found that I love your word choices you use. For example: But effects of pedantic prose and holiest tomes expands, torn by our fiddling hands, ^^^That line really stood out for me when it comes to your word choice. I fuckin love that line. The entire last stanza is quoteable but instead of doing that I'll just it was fuckin ill man. Easily the best work I've seen from you Split. Props.