W3: Listen (1-0) vs. Unborn Buddha (1-0) -- UnbornBuddha 4-1

asylum · 10-19-2014, 09:14 PM

unbornbuddha - a little too wordy for me bro. i really enjoyed where you were going with it but just got lost in the excess diction. perhaps some inners or more multiples would have helped me. but the flow felt off. and drawn out. like your style just, didn't best your opponent this week.
/v listen - idk who u are or how u roll but your flow bested your opponent this week. the whole storyline was pretty fucked up. i mean, you couldve just used to introductory sentences in between plot connections.. and it wouldve been way more fluent. but in all reality, you kept syllable counts in line with rhymes in a way that i felt what you said more. so i think you won this week.

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10-19-2014, 09:14 PM	#6
asylum Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 999 Battle Record: 7-5 Rep Power: 8214211	unbornbuddha - a little too wordy for me bro. i really enjoyed where you were going with it but just got lost in the excess diction. perhaps some inners or more multiples would have helped me. but the flow felt off. and drawn out. like your style just, didn't best your opponent this week. /v listen - idk who u are or how u roll but your flow bested your opponent this week. the whole storyline was pretty fucked up. i mean, you couldve just used to introductory sentences in between plot connections.. and it wouldve been way more fluent. but in all reality, you kept syllable counts in line with rhymes in a way that i felt what you said more. so i think you won this week.