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Vulgar · 04-05-2013, 09:21 PM

@Witty

Very tender, organic language. Completely separate from status quo "love poetry" that gets gushy but never conveys real emotional content. You delivered on this one with a heartfelt story. The reader is introduced to the main character thoroughly, and the opening language prepares the reader for a crescendo of disappointment; an outcome usually associated with a death caused by cancer. I thought this was really good, Witty.

Keep doing you

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04-05-2013, 09:21 PM	#6
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	@Witty Very tender, organic language. Completely separate from status quo "love poetry" that gets gushy but never conveys real emotional content. You delivered on this one with a heartfelt story. The reader is introduced to the main character thoroughly, and the opening language prepares the reader for a crescendo of disappointment; an outcome usually associated with a death caused by cancer. I thought this was really good, Witty. Keep doing you