WK2 : Mr.J(1-0) vs. Vulgar(1-0) -- Vulgar 6-0

[Adonis]

Quote made me laugh though

Jay - This verse was done well. Fine writing, truly. At first I thought you literally were god creating a work of art in female form, which would have been just a crazy concept. Then you mentioned god by name, so that crushed that theory. I shortly realized exactly where you were going with this. One thing I didn't like is you mentioned giving her dark eyes to show the pain, then mentioned blue eyes as the ocean. Doesn't matter, the verse start to end was very strong writing with intense images and descriptions that I thoroughly enjoyed....All the way down to when you incorporated the topic. I hated that, it felt effortless, like you wrote a verse and paid close attention to detail, then realized it didn't fit topic 199% so you added the final bar. All in all, very solid verse, would be perfect if not for the two errors I listed.


Vulgar - The way you incorporated the topic was simply majestic bro. You didn't use the full quote because Maslow's partner was placing the his forehead brick there. Description galore, you said "about the size of Stonehenge’s block".... This here gave me a precise measurement to how large the brick mural is. You did the same by mentioning Lenox although I'll admit, I don't picture the great Lewis when I see the name Robinson Maslow, more like Ben stein. Anyways, this verse was virtually seamless, it moved along with consistent pace and fluidity. I can't think of a single thing that i disliked, at first it was the spelling of Leaves, because I always thought it was leafs, but turns out I was wrong.


This is a top notch battle, you both honestly deserve a win here considering some of the other verses I've read. As close a battle as I've read in while, both very enjoyable reads.


Voting Vulgar


Slight edge in having strong execution regarding mechanics. Yes, it was that close