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09-12-2014, 07:59 AM
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LOL i'm not sure many will get Objective's Eden lake reference apart from me, but either way, jilti got this. Just smoother wording and execution of concepts right throughout his verse. gestures / Just Yours doesnt work in my accent but I allow some leniancy, i'm sure @Destroyer will have something to say about tit though. Erm, yeah, that's about it.
jilti for the smoother overall verse here.
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