Round 2: 7. Diode vs. 2. oats \\ oats wins 10-(-4)

Cormier · 09-07-2014, 03:04 PM

Oats- pretty cool take on the topic. I like the tie in of people have had idiotic ideas before, so maybe you being special is another one. the rhyming was solid. i liked the different ideas you set forth and i thought you very much accomplished your idea in the 10 lines, which is obviously the hardest thing to do in this tournament. only negative i really see in this verse is that i think the 3rd and 8th lines are stretched quite a bit.

Diode- hmmm, the imagery was vivid, rhyming was subtle, which i liked. i like your idea on the topic very much, but i don't like that you only really spent one line on it. i think this verse definitely could have used a longer line limit. i feel like you have a great start to a longer verse, and then just had to rush the ending to tie it into the topic.

VOTE= Oats

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09-07-2014, 03:04 PM	#11
Cormier Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 16 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 0	Oats- pretty cool take on the topic. I like the tie in of people have had idiotic ideas before, so maybe you being special is another one. the rhyming was solid. i liked the different ideas you set forth and i thought you very much accomplished your idea in the 10 lines, which is obviously the hardest thing to do in this tournament. only negative i really see in this verse is that i think the 3rd and 8th lines are stretched quite a bit. Diode- hmmm, the imagery was vivid, rhyming was subtle, which i liked. i like your idea on the topic very much, but i don't like that you only really spent one line on it. i think this verse definitely could have used a longer line limit. i feel like you have a great start to a longer verse, and then just had to rush the ending to tie it into the topic. VOTE= Oats