Round 1: 13. jilti vs. 4. NYCSPITZ \\ jilti wins 8-5

[oats]

NYC this was an interesting take, as far as what I got out of it. Very reminiscent of The Last Question by Isaac Asimov, the last call for humanity as it becomes immortal in artificial intelligence, stripping itself of body and all physical anchors to become pure energy.SHIT LIKE THAT. But I can definitely see some knocks for lack of clarity here. Perhaps this single moment was packed with too much for 10 lines, hard to get a grasp of all the elements that matter in such a short frame. I enjoyed it, though, for what I believe it is.

Jilti: lol I liked this, def did a good job at subverting my expectations, and the humor worked. do people still use sex phone lines? either way, you built up to the moment well, and the writing itself was solid, if not as ostentatious as NYC's. overall this was good, the twist that it was hinging on was effective and you executed what you were going for. It was simple, but it worked.

Vote: This is really difficult. On the one hand NYC was more ambitious, but sacrificed some clarity as a result. Jilti had cleaner execution for a clever, if not easier approach. NYC had the better writing, but not so much so that it weighs in on this vote much. It's close as fuck, and it comes down to my personal appeals here, and as much as I enjoy a good jerking off verse, NYC captured something a bit more fascinating with his 10 lines. Great battle, hats off to both.