AOWL Week 7 Champ: Frank (5-0) vs. Red glare (4-1) [FRANK WINS, 12-1.]

[Split]

Barakon. didn't know you were nice like this... good tactical choice going for the multis against Frank, btw. Could've been executed a little smoother however. "oy" is a pretty harsh/ guttural sound to be repeating every line, read like a battle chant.

the angle was also fresh. have you read A Canticle for Leibowicz?

angels; wing spans; that caused drafts that dampened the spirits of 'bad';
who Sigmund Freud would later psycho analyze; as cracked,
language the lord would not entertain;ears clasped to avoid;
4 corners of earth - unknown to maps and tabloids;

iight!

strong diction. 143 would be proud loll. but yo, your punctuation was really incorrect. it didnt affect how i read it lol but it annoyed me. you're using Blacketh sentence fragments, no need to put together the semblance of proper grammar when hackneyed commas do the trick.


FRANK.

Where water was pure like pouring britta; the poor cleansed their pores in swarms of fingers.

:cool:
Reminds me of that Esmerelda verse, somehow.

So isolated; they've escaped both benefit and burden - sworn from heaven
They haven't saw us yet. They are still busy with the morning agendas.
Our guide, tells us - "whatever we do; Do not shout towards the Seneca
It is important not to disturb the 4th world" he says - adoring vigor.
We had toured through dementia; time warped visitors

essence


Both dope angles on the topic. I didn't break down Frank's verse at all, because I thought about it for awhile and couldnt think of anything to say. in a good way, like everything has been said. I will add that his wording was excellent. lots of dope mini-details that crept through the cracks, small phrases that were anything but purposeless.

mechanics-wise and wording-wise, Frank took this. much smoother. I liked Red Glare's verse a lot... the concept was ill, if Frank hadn't come to the plate with a good story on deck he wouldve lost i think.

V/ FRANK