THE ANTI-BRAGGADOCIO PIECE (feat. Destroyer)

Vulgar · 08-23-2014, 12:43 PM

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Ghost1 · 08-23-2014, 01:01 PM

LOOOOOL.

2nd verse was doper to me.....des im geussin....vulg was nice too tho

Wouodve loved to get down on this ....great concept....maybe ill write the remix

Way dead at the very last line about the car runnin out of gas haha

Vulgars schemes were crisper but destroyers content was stronger. Good read regardless.

veritas · 08-23-2014, 01:24 PM

Dope and funny and awesome.

DexLabb · 08-23-2014, 01:47 PM

ur guys lines are way too stretched. legit too many syllables. remember what orwell said, the more words you require in a sentence, the less profound your ability to express yourself. shorten them up big time, legit, ight

dull boy · 08-23-2014, 03:45 PM

I liked this.

NYCSPITZ · 08-23-2014, 08:47 PM

LOL

Hof j 4 novelty

CopyPat · 08-24-2014, 09:50 PM

good collab, good post overall. this wasn't really a new idea though. rapping about how shitty you are etc. def doesn't get done enough but this wasn't groundbreaking by any means. nonetheless i thoroughly enjoyed this. smooth read with some obvious humor. solid open mic

Kin · 08-24-2014, 10:02 PM

damn my 1st comment didn't take gotta do it again half ass

verse 1
There are rubies in Burma that I'll never lay my hands on
today I pledged allegiance to the Sect of Flaming Tampons
if you thought I was a cutthroat renegade you're damn wrong

like how you threw the half-seriousness direction wit' the bar enderz kinda threw me off at 1st but I caught it...made it more entertaining

2nd-
a top nerd, about to champ my fantasy roster & get the last word
but my neighbor caught me skeezin his wi-fi, & changed the password
haha nice

another dope style...lovin' that last bar car outta gas shit...had me wit' that

overall the approach you two took made thiz stand out more then normal..good to see You can switch up the content like thiz an still make it fire

Yesssiiiir

HoLLa

Exis · 08-25-2014, 01:53 AM

I'm already familiar with Vulgar's work and have only peeped one of Desroyer's joints which I liked so it seemed fittin' to check this out...impressive no doubt.

Both your flows are slick with it, didn't really like one verse more than the other tbh.Thought content was equally good...agree with Copy this isn't a new concept but I liked what y'all did here...tight read all 'round.

Sorry can't quote atm...stay uppity fellas.

Malachi · 08-25-2014, 06:52 PM

This was cool

I liked the second part the best.

Certain · 08-28-2014, 01:11 AM

Vulgar hit the rhymes hard and had a very nice scheme that kept in time with its cadence. Some of the lines were a bit too forward, though, not with the tongue-in-cheek style that I think you hit best with the last line of the verse. Some of that might have been the rhyming, like "posterboard full of cat pee." Something better could have happened with that superhero call sign line.

Destroyer's verse was a bit more visual and real in its depiction of a loser, and it worked a bit better on the comedy angle as a result. The last line of his verse also was his standout, but I really liked the gravy stains line, too. The real-life details helped accentuate the loserdom, though, and made it a more enjoyable and funny verse even without the technical display Vulgar showed.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bags

Wouodve loved to get down on this ....great concept....maybe ill write the remix

I'm in.

theMuzzl3 · 08-28-2014, 04:44 AM

damn.

Plot · 08-28-2014, 01:58 PM

Nice collab.
Des finisher was lulz

big baby · 08-28-2014, 03:55 PM

solid om, mediocre piece. ran out of gas was the only ok thing, and that was ehhh. sucked imo

Destroyer · 08-29-2014, 07:29 PM

I'll rape u baby in ur baby ass @evil big baby

Geno · 08-29-2014, 10:16 PM

Bothvyall went in.
Felt a couple of destros li es a little more. Definitely felt a smoother flow on vulgars end. Always with a nice touch. Both had some stand outs thiugh..

Quantum physical was dope

Then the wifi and ran out of gas closer both had me chucklin.

Good shit fellerz

Then

Adonis · 08-30-2014, 02:12 AM

Vulgar was first verse Obvi?? I enjoyed the long, un orthodox rhymes. I liked the concept in both verses, enjoyed the flow in the first more then then second, yet enjoyed the message of the second more. You two make for a good collab. Similar to Black Hippie. Half is nerdy and lyrically dope, the other half is just gutter and speaks to my soul.

Good shit faggots, I hope you both realize you aren't wining in life.

08-23-2014, 12:43 PM	#1
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	THE ANTI-BRAGGADOCIO PIECE (feat. Destroyer) T Last edited by Vulgar; 12-06-2021 at 10:47 AM.

08-23-2014, 01:47 PM	#4
DexLabb song genius Join Date: Sep 2013 Posts: 377 Rep Power: 0	ur guys lines are way too stretched. legit too many syllables. remember what orwell said, the more words you require in a sentence, the less profound your ability to express yourself. shorten them up big time, legit, ight __________________ ZOOM IN ON THAT ASS LIKE BINOCULARS

08-23-2014, 08:47 PM	#6
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	LOL Hof j 4 novelty __________________ UNIFIED THEORY

08-24-2014, 09:50 PM	#7
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	good collab, good post overall. this wasn't really a new idea though. rapping about how shitty you are etc. def doesn't get done enough but this wasn't groundbreaking by any means. nonetheless i thoroughly enjoyed this. smooth read with some obvious humor. solid open mic __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-25-2014, 06:52 PM	#10
Malachi Negus Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,529 Battle Record: 5-10 Champed - Newbie Tourney VI Rep Power: 82877410	This was cool I liked the second part the best. __________________ Seen the spectrum through the prisms

08-23-2014, 03:45 PM	#5
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,054 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	I liked this.

08-24-2014, 10:02 PM	#8
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662201	damn my 1st comment didn't take gotta do it again half ass verse 1 There are rubies in Burma that I'll never lay my hands on today I pledged allegiance to the Sect of Flaming Tampons if you thought I was a cutthroat renegade you're damn wrong like how you threw the half-seriousness direction wit' the bar enderz kinda threw me off at 1st but I caught it...made it more entertaining 2nd- a top nerd, about to champ my fantasy roster & get the last word but my neighbor caught me skeezin his wi-fi, & changed the password haha nice another dope style...lovin' that last bar car outta gas shit...had me wit' that overall the approach you two took made thiz stand out more then normal..good to see You can switch up the content like thiz an still make it fire Yesssiiiir HoLLa

08-25-2014, 01:53 AM	#9
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	I'm already familiar with Vulgar's work and have only peeped one of Desroyer's joints which I liked so it seemed fittin' to check this out...impressive no doubt. Both your flows are slick with it, didn't really like one verse more than the other tbh.Thought content was equally good...agree with Copy this isn't a new concept but I liked what y'all did here...tight read all 'round. Sorry can't quote atm...stay uppity fellas.

08-28-2014, 01:58 PM	#13
Plot Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,374 Battle Record: 26-32 Rep Power: 1309744	Nice collab. Des finisher was lulz

08-29-2014, 10:16 PM	#16
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Bothvyall went in. Felt a couple of destros li es a little more. Definitely felt a smoother flow on vulgars end. Always with a nice touch. Both had some stand outs thiugh.. Quantum physical was dope Then the wifi and ran out of gas closer both had me chucklin. Good shit fellerz Then __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-30-2014, 02:12 AM	#17
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	Vulgar was first verse Obvi?? I enjoyed the long, un orthodox rhymes. I liked the concept in both verses, enjoyed the flow in the first more then then second, yet enjoyed the message of the second more. You two make for a good collab. Similar to Black Hippie. Half is nerdy and lyrically dope, the other half is just gutter and speaks to my soul. Good shit faggots, I hope you both realize you aren't wining in life. __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR

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