Vigilante

UnbornBuddha · 08-06-2014, 01:52 AM

This was entertaining. Clint Eastwood would approve. I am fond of western flicks. Old saloons, anarchy, and good old showdowns. They truly are a treat. You captured the essence of it very well. However, some parts seemed rushed, especially about his tragic family death at the hands of the bandits. I'm not suggesting you tell us how they got slayed, but it is the motivation factor that turned such a pious man into the vengeful fighter he is "today". So it would be nice if you somehow unraveled certain plot elements further. In retrospect, this is an enjoyable piece. Thank you.

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08-06-2014, 01:52 AM	#5
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	This was entertaining. Clint Eastwood would approve. I am fond of western flicks. Old saloons, anarchy, and good old showdowns. They truly are a treat. You captured the essence of it very well. However, some parts seemed rushed, especially about his tragic family death at the hands of the bandits. I'm not suggesting you tell us how they got slayed, but it is the motivation factor that turned such a pious man into the vengeful fighter he is "today". So it would be nice if you somehow unraveled certain plot elements further. In retrospect, this is an enjoyable piece. Thank you.