We Have Awoke a Sleeping Giant

Vulgar · 08-05-2014, 11:14 PM

and as they try to backpedal all these retreating tyrants,
will pay dearly for turning all the trees into papyrus,
^Pretty cool stuff here.

It actually had a purpose and a point it was trying to convey. The rhyming was the highlight towards the middle, and the part I quoted above is interesting, because it refers to all humanity as tyrannical, since we use trees for our own benefit, forging our own unique, yet destructive tree of life.

Judging this from a critical standpoint, it wasn't wholly original and it didn't really cover any new ground. It's traditional rap styled which means it's written well, just not as out of the box as I prefer, but this is just my preference.

Keep doing you

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08-05-2014, 11:14 PM	#8
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	and as they try to backpedal all these retreating tyrants, will pay dearly for turning all the trees into papyrus, ^Pretty cool stuff here. It actually had a purpose and a point it was trying to convey. The rhyming was the highlight towards the middle, and the part I quoted above is interesting, because it refers to all humanity as tyrannical, since we use trees for our own benefit, forging our own unique, yet destructive tree of life. Judging this from a critical standpoint, it wasn't wholly original and it didn't really cover any new ground. It's traditional rap styled which means it's written well, just not as out of the box as I prefer, but this is just my preference. Keep doing you