Drippy Eye / perfect

UnbornBuddha · 07-18-2014, 02:10 PM

This was very enjoyable. And I do enjoy you using botanical plants to illicit a certain reaction from the reader. You have very vivid imagery, as cliche as that statement probably is. Although it will be nice if you manipulated the verse to have a rising and a fall, to a climax. There seems to be no real climax that grapples the reader and throws them into the abyss of unknowing wondering the provenance of it all. I do believe your quite capable of doing so considering your talent, and imagination.

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07-18-2014, 02:10 PM	#2
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	This was very enjoyable. And I do enjoy you using botanical plants to illicit a certain reaction from the reader. You have very vivid imagery, as cliche as that statement probably is. Although it will be nice if you manipulated the verse to have a rising and a fall, to a climax. There seems to be no real climax that grapples the reader and throws them into the abyss of unknowing wondering the provenance of it all. I do believe your quite capable of doing so considering your talent, and imagination.