Week 13: 7. zygote (9-3) vs. 8. Soulstice (1-3) \\ zygote wins 4-3

[Adonis]

Sorry kids...Ziggie dropped straight knowledge. You told me a couple weeks ago that you read my verse and beyond the "gimmick" (fun I had) there just wasn't any meat. I agreed with you, I came to nit pick this gimmick and honestly, it's one of the better verses I will remember this season. The knowledge is just absolute, the rhymes even bro. The flow was solid, I don't care too much about the beginning letters as you taught me via the league you ran, challenging myself/yourself is actually easy, more fun less challenge. Although I commend you for it, I respect the words more as the resonated in a deep level and simply blew mi noggin.

Two verses that I've read from you in a row soul lead me to the same complaint. You started off slow with the rhyme bro. If I read this with intended sentences, (in accordance with proper punctuation instead of when you break the lines/bars up) the flow isn't that great. It's still not bad, but its pegged down a few inches. But, that is the beginning. You quickly pick up speed and correct my lodged complaint, in few words, I wish the writers voice/flow of verse followed the bottom 3/4's in suit more closely. Content wise I took this as a mother and child being beat by the father, although that does not align with the topic. The writing is solid. I think we might suffer from a similar ailment in that we think of these nice concepts but have a difficult time in some instances making it known to the reader. All in all I did like the read, just not up to snuff IMO.


Voting Zyg for having the more polarizing/captivating verse considering my personal preference.