Week 13: 7. zygote (9-3) vs. 8. Soulstice (1-3) \\ zygote wins 4-3

Vulgar · 05-25-2014, 11:48 PM

Zygote - Brilliant work. I was fond of this, and it shows how good you are at maintaining a momentous rhyme scheme while literally noting down observations about the building blocks of life. The way I interpreted this was how when we evolve we say goodbye to a previous trait or characteristic that's been determined to be obsolete by nature itself. We are constantly coming and going, a regenerating physical substance with substance. Overall, you did a hell of a job here.

Soulstice - This might have been about a wife whose husband is killed by a lightning strike or a weather related incident, and she's forced to raise her son by herself, while being in a cloudy mood herself. At first I thought it was about mother nature but the fantasy element of the ice queen led me to believe that she was in fact human, circumventing her troubles through fairy tale references in order to form a metaphor worthy enough to assist her in bearing the pain of losing her partner. Your rhyming isn't as sharp as it used to be, but your language is as elegant and suitable as ever.

This was a great battle, one of the many classics of this league. My vote goes to Zyg.

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05-25-2014, 11:48 PM	#6
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	Zygote - Brilliant work. I was fond of this, and it shows how good you are at maintaining a momentous rhyme scheme while literally noting down observations about the building blocks of life. The way I interpreted this was how when we evolve we say goodbye to a previous trait or characteristic that's been determined to be obsolete by nature itself. We are constantly coming and going, a regenerating physical substance with substance. Overall, you did a hell of a job here. Soulstice - This might have been about a wife whose husband is killed by a lightning strike or a weather related incident, and she's forced to raise her son by herself, while being in a cloudy mood herself. At first I thought it was about mother nature but the fantasy element of the ice queen led me to believe that she was in fact human, circumventing her troubles through fairy tale references in order to form a metaphor worthy enough to assist her in bearing the pain of losing her partner. Your rhyming isn't as sharp as it used to be, but your language is as elegant and suitable as ever. This was a great battle, one of the many classics of this league. My vote goes to Zyg.