AOWL Week 5 CHAMPIONSHIP MATCH: Frank (4-0) VS. zygote (3-0) (FRANK WINS 10-4)

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zygote:
First thing I noticed was your usage of the quotations... I don't think they were examples of the most effective way to use quotes and it made some of your lines feel a bit cheesy.. Give us a little more credit, I'm sure most of us here will pick up on your points without you needing to emphasize them in such a way. The piece overall was intriguing and thought provoking. Vocabulary used was great and you did a good job of presenting various tech scenarios without coming off as scattered or without purpose.

Frank:
This was a pretty comical and smooth read (in a good way). You can definitely rhyme and the way you separated the verses with some freeverse worked well.. However, there wasn't much meat on the bone with respect to the ideas presented.. And for this kind of piece, that isn't a necessity at all, however...

when comparing the two verses, I felt zygote had the better piece. Both were pretty solid, but zygote's also had a depth to it that i appreciated..

Vote- zygote