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Zenland this was your best flow yet kid. Somebody quoted the line that I felt was, to the T.
Born to breed and once we've bore a seed we're forced to leave.' But I really like this line; 'cause in the end we all turn to ashes, Burning pastures for the words of masters Learning laughter and the words we chatter gather no worth or matter,' You are a great ranter. They are in the moment and give you a kind of edge. Red glare, well well well, what do we have here. Major elevation from week 1. I thought the twist was unexpected and well done. Flow was pretty good. Did have a 'Black' appeal like cake mentioned. Solid verse. Keep it up. Gotta go with Zenland for a greater message though
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