deadman - GRAVETRIPPER

[Split]

opener was serene. how Jack and Aku.

bathtub runways was unreal, really enjoyed the original idioms throughout. things that aren't consciously conceptualized but exist in all of our lives. If this little forum had any readership the effects would be shakespearian. I think about that all the time.


this verse felt dusky. anti-finite but limited. the fuzzy scrapings of shadowfall within the in between. commuter rail nostalgia.


I feel as though this piece was a search for a feeling or idea too subtle for description, too many shades of gray, but perhaps it is a very particular feeling or idea that isn't as commercialized as hallmark greeting card emotion tones


it was all very comfortable and personable, but not emphatic. well-written vent or release without being contrived literature like so many drops seem to be (not u personally I mean everyone's always grinding for recognition).

I enjoyed it though. Keep writing black.