Week 5 championship: Frank (4-0) vs. oats (4-0) vs. Vividlyvague (4-0) \\ oats wins 3-1-0

[King Ra.]

I read this Saturday morning and have been torn deciding who I'm voting for. For me, it comes down to the two more creative stories. Vivid, you've progressed greatly and that's why you're here in this title match. You have a unique way of telling stories and your style is similar to Just Write somewhat, except that you really take the more unorthodox route concept-wise. Your piece here however wasn't one of your best conceptually and compared to what oats and Frank put together, this wasn't up to par. That's not saying your story was bad.... your dialogue was good, your rhyming was as well, but the story itself didn't seem to come around in it's fullness. The ending was a head scratcher for me. I felt you could have done it differently or, you could have added more to top it off. The real setback is that this wasn't as creative as some of your better pieces and I was expecting something really interesting and crazy from you. Oats, you entered the dream world on this one. So I'll tell you, that you earned preference points for that. That's my niche. Your writing was the more complex of this match up and you do so well to really present the details. I liked the fading in and out of different "memories" or thoughts of your character being led by what I believe projections of his subconscious. Very deep stuff. You didn't focus too much on rhyming to drive the story along, which was a good move because this piece is very content driven, and it worked out very well. You ended this story much better than Vivid, tying the topic into everything very well. Frank, you had the more creative story here, and of course your end rhyme style was part of the driving force in the fluidity of your piece. I feel Vivid and oats went a more bit complex, and maybe you figured that, so the direction you took wasn't as complex but also not simplistic. You did a good job in describing the moments in the game, centered around Micheal Jordan in his days wearing the Carolina blue. Your main character, imo, seemed like one of the players, at least that's what I believed. The part of the father which you slid in there in-between I didn't fully get, but maybe Cake was correct in that it's a father-son watching the game live or at home. But you also described the moments with the coach interacting with his players, particularly Jordan, which gave me reason to believe your main character is one of the guys on the court. Either case, I really enjoyed reading your piece.

Vivid put together a story which I felt wasn't one of his better work and compared to his opponents was the weakest. I liked oats sort of complex dive into the mind and Frank's snap shot take of a basketball game was intriguing and well written. So who do I vote for? Preference wise, oats wrote about a world that I love to explore and he did an excellent job with it. But, believe it or not, when I read through these pieces Frank's reeled me in from beginning to end. What better way to capture the essence of "don't let me down", and I felt Frank did that while telling an exciting story on the basketball court.

MVGT: Frank. Good job by all competitors.