AOWL Week 5: Innovator (2-2) VS. King Keith (1-1) OPEN FOR VOTES!!!

IamBenT · 03-18-2013, 09:26 AM

Tough cookie,

Innovator - I felt that you really came through with an interesting, poetic message, good use of vocabulary and an interesting message at the end of the World being abused by our cruel ways, You do a great job of anthropomorphizing man throughout to connect to the topic, I felt this verse really only lacked some solid imagery and a better rhyme scheme and flow.

King Keith- Really liked the second verse the most, about the lion, thats where I felt you really had a strong stride. Great message and really connected to the topic in a visceral way that I could picture and follow along. Solid showing.

Vote - King Keith for a better verse

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03-18-2013, 09:26 AM	#11
IamBenT SuPreaM Lyricyst Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: San Antonio, TX Posts: 704 Battle Record: 9-6 Rep Power: 412358	Tough cookie, Innovator - I felt that you really came through with an interesting, poetic message, good use of vocabulary and an interesting message at the end of the World being abused by our cruel ways, You do a great job of anthropomorphizing man throughout to connect to the topic, I felt this verse really only lacked some solid imagery and a better rhyme scheme and flow. King Keith- Really liked the second verse the most, about the lion, thats where I felt you really had a strong stride. Great message and really connected to the topic in a visceral way that I could picture and follow along. Solid showing. Vote - King Keith for a better verse