Week 3: Just Write (2-0) vs. patrown (2-0) \\ Just Write wins 9-1

Ink · 03-17-2014, 02:29 AM

Just Write: The start of this verse was cool, and in general there was a laid-back demeanor to the piece. "They have this cool little feature that will text your phone if you get a reply
And I send out a ton of messages.. yea, im a copy and paste kinda guy." was hilarious.. The read was smooth, but the lasts stanza was notably weaker than the others imo.

Patrown: The verse was hilarious, but it seemed like you weren't able to spend much time on the verse this week.. The writing was inconsistent and generally not at the level that I've come to expect from you.. But - getting a land rover stuck in Oprah's crevice? what the fuck. rofl... The idea behind the verse was nice, but the execution just wasn't there this week.

Vote: Just Write for a better verse overall

03-17-2014, 02:29 AM	#11
Ink Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 329 Battle Record: 5-5 Rep Power: 60	Just Write: The start of this verse was cool, and in general there was a laid-back demeanor to the piece. "They have this cool little feature that will text your phone if you get a reply And I send out a ton of messages.. yea, im a copy and paste kinda guy." was hilarious.. The read was smooth, but the lasts stanza was notably weaker than the others imo. Patrown: The verse was hilarious, but it seemed like you weren't able to spend much time on the verse this week.. The writing was inconsistent and generally not at the level that I've come to expect from you.. But - getting a land rover stuck in Oprah's crevice? what the fuck. rofl... The idea behind the verse was nice, but the execution just wasn't there this week. Vote: Just Write for a better verse overall __________________ Pen and Thread Bent \| Nom \| Ink STILL working on that book I left competing for... ig: @dchang.poetry

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