Week 3: Vividlyvague (1-1) vs. King Ra. (1-1) \\ Vividlyvague wins 9-4

Vulgar · 03-16-2014, 11:04 PM

VV - Well, this was creative as hell... you really kept my attention throughout the whole thing and I was eager to receive more info about the characters. The use of three topics was daring, if a bit unnecessary, since you had me convinced and it was progressing successfully. What I liked about this was its sporadic, upbeat quality, and that it didn't take itself too seriously.

King Ra - The format was entertaining and the voice was effective; however, with that said, the ending was completely foreseeable. This was the downfall of your verse, IMO. Huge opportunity here though if you wanted to discuss more about how attending your own funeral is a unique experience, I thought that would've been cool to mess around with.

VVote - VV

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03-16-2014, 11:04 PM	#12
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604320	VV - Well, this was creative as hell... you really kept my attention throughout the whole thing and I was eager to receive more info about the characters. The use of three topics was daring, if a bit unnecessary, since you had me convinced and it was progressing successfully. What I liked about this was its sporadic, upbeat quality, and that it didn't take itself too seriously. King Ra - The format was entertaining and the voice was effective; however, with that said, the ending was completely foreseeable. This was the downfall of your verse, IMO. Huge opportunity here though if you wanted to discuss more about how attending your own funeral is a unique experience, I thought that would've been cool to mess around with. VVote - VV