Tomorrow is gravid.

Saila · 03-10-2014, 07:36 AM

Gotta agree with Juan Carlos Paccito Machitto above - I also wanted more of the first section - but so! Who am I to dictate what you shoulda woulda coulda wrote?
The first section story telling was bang on point. Sometimes, you can think of a story to tell, but struggle a bit trying to articulate what's in your head, thus it doesn't come out right. You got it right here though. And the story came out perfectly.
I loved how you went onto the second section. The imagery shone through clearly with the descriptiveness of this piece. Brilliant work!!

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03-10-2014, 07:36 AM	#6
Saila Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2014 Posts: 179 Rep Power: 35	Gotta agree with Juan Carlos Paccito Machitto above - I also wanted more of the first section - but so! Who am I to dictate what you shoulda woulda coulda wrote? The first section story telling was bang on point. Sometimes, you can think of a story to tell, but struggle a bit trying to articulate what's in your head, thus it doesn't come out right. You got it right here though. And the story came out perfectly. I loved how you went onto the second section. The imagery shone through clearly with the descriptiveness of this piece. Brilliant work!!