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02-04-2014, 09:46 PM
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The COAT...
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i was entertained. this is like a deadman branded s&f. didn't go deep into concepts but had more imagery in those lines then most do in twice the amount. collapsing your lung line seemed a bit cliche, especially that close to the beginning of the verse, but that's the only thing that stood out to me. different sorta drop but i was diggin in
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