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01-29-2014, 06:39 AM
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You managed to pull off a desolate and bleak tone in this one, the first part was the most interesting for me as the 2 opening bars was phrased really cool. I also liked this "crisp sank in like teeth an widowed like a wither whim death... tasty".
Towards the end I felt it kinda drifted off into ambiguity. A good read none the less. |
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