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01-16-2014, 10:44 AM
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This was okay, more bad then good. Most of your rhyme scheme had near rhymes, such as "existence, next nexus, 6's" unless you have a really strong accent they don't exactly rhyme as well as other words can. I did like the last lines though, I feel that if worded a bit better, It would have been a really good line. But not bad at all, look forward to reading more of your work.
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