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[Geno]

Hey. Don't pin those tags to me and zyg though.. far as I can see we are the mods, and I know for a fact zyg didn't leave those. And if you think I did, then you don't know me very well. Cheap laughs aren't my fortay.. although at times I may chuckle off tags, I never leave any

This verse needs work. You had a lot to say, just seems to me like your missing key words in every line that would help deliver your message more clearly. This almost seems like a set of jotted concepts that havnt been pulled together into a final piece yet, if that makes sense? I get the feel your foreign maybe? Is that what the difficulty is... or do you just think this verse made sense and don't know any better?

Not tryingg to be a smart ass, just trying to get a better feel for who you are. Good to see you back around btw, if I havnt already expressed that. Stay active. Don't let criticism bother you. That's what posting is all about, no one is gonna get all praise all the the time.. espcially when it isn't deserved. Just needs some brushing up