The Last Of Us

Exis · 01-09-2014, 08:10 PM

so now we're stuck with the trials and tribulations of wild vindication
incarcerated in a vile sinner's sanctum masquerading as a tyrants civil nation

^^Nice.

demise and deception, a rise of inception
decline in the mind of the giants that tempt it
the grind is redemption, and once the timing reflects it
we will find the hand of the clock will supply our ascension

^^Dope.

This is tight man...some great multies from start to finish, I liked the beginnin' but it's the italic section and what I quoted that really stood out to me.Imagery is also sumthin' you had a lot of here, scheme imo was all good...the first half was solid yet it's the content in the second stanza that really caught my attention over your multie use and butter flow...great read bro.

Stay uppity.

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01-09-2014, 08:10 PM	#1
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	so now we're stuck with the trials and tribulations of wild vindication incarcerated in a vile sinner's sanctum masquerading as a tyrants civil nation ^^Nice. demise and deception, a rise of inception decline in the mind of the giants that tempt it the grind is redemption, and once the timing reflects it we will find the hand of the clock will supply our ascension ^^Dope. This is tight man...some great multies from start to finish, I liked the beginnin' but it's the italic section and what I quoted that really stood out to me.Imagery is also sumthin' you had a lot of here, scheme imo was all good...the first half was solid yet it's the content in the second stanza that really caught my attention over your multie use and butter flow...great read bro. Stay uppity.