the game of love

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Originally Posted by Just Write

Love.. is a voidless emotion,
Ive sat here poised and toyed with the notion
That maybe it's the thought of love..
...that's poison is potent.
↑that was fucking ill .
I'm hopeless..
Hopelessly lost, hopeless in thoughts
Hopelessly hoping it was all worth the cost
Dude the steeze here is dope.
I don't even know how to fully articulate
And pin point what is is...perhaps wording.
Tossing and turning, yet yearning for love
A church on the hill, a silloquette of doves
Ive hugged this pillow tight, thoughts of you
on a yatcht at noon. Coffee for two
En-capsulated beauty, it's essence fulfilled
Crimson silk sheets meshed with a tinge of filth
Oh the sin was real, i pinned you against the steel oven
Still smell a hint of garlic andthe scent of grilled onions

You said i feel something, i made a dirty joke
Then you returned with a wink & "yea, well i like to be choked"
Dope

I hardy spoke to you before that day of enticement
I lied to you about how marriage was priceless
She thought i was a caring gentleman, ever so nice
Til i inherited trust then embarrassed her rights
lol
A harrowing plight, decieved this angel for a piece of ass
Then casted her away like she was a piece of trash
What a brash experience. like a book keeper beating the odds
But i was delerious, in thinking how i was playing a god
To pull at ones love strings is really a shame
But hell, when it comes to love i just love playing the game.

Overall pretty dope.
Not a whole lot to critique Imo.
Everything here is more preference than anything.
You either like it or you don't. The mechanics are solid though.
I pretty much commented on the portions I liked most.


Answer ya pm's fucker lol
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