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Old 12-29-2013, 04:37 AM   #1
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This is my lyrical assault, I'm a miracle evolved with superior resolve
Exterior is leather my interior is better with millions of letters in the vault
All steel balls installed that I gotta haul so I walk and talk like the hulk
I'm counting steps to the counter before I encounter a slip then a fall
I guess I'll just stick to the wall and keep flipping the business to ya'll
Addict to the cause, match lit for the gods, a havoc at it, erradic floss
No gloves when I box, torn up mugs and stuffed em with the gauze
Orange lugs to the chops and a curb for lunch to the jaws of some
Its awesome fun to be flaunting my multi's like an electric bolt gun
Explo-sion of the whole o-pun mic, o-verload the site with dope son
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Old 12-29-2013, 05:21 PM   #2
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Some of this didn't make sense to me like the electric bolt line, and the o-pun line seemed a bit stressed. Overall it's decent. I understand you focused mainly on the multis but personally I've read way better from you, like the collabo you had with Geno among others.
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Old 12-29-2013, 08:28 PM   #3
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i really admire the fluidity of your drops, the multis, some of it was hit and miss but even the greatest works of art has flaws, its the outcome that matters and the finished product and how you perceive it. A fan of bragging, and i am better than you and heres proof writtens, and this falls in line.
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Word. Good looks.
It was just a exercise more than anything.
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