12-26-2013, 12:52 AM | #1 |
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Anticipation
i guess
it's sad for itself. a silhouette that sat on the shelf unaware of how abandonment felt. home is a thought of overindulgence. note to mirage - you're bad for my health what can you do but wait in silence for the capsule to melt my brother heard a voice, screaming. asking for help now that he's gone it seems i've picked up on the habit as well so pick me up a twenty-bag or drag me to hell from an era where the thrill is gone and abstinence sells it gets harder to tell whether monogamy counts when there's passion in the battlefield but not at the house olive her skin, tonic her svedka, cotton her blouse communicating undercover like reconnaissance scouts put my keys on the table. put that shot in her mouth she opens up like caves of wonder Ali Ababwa recounts it only got quieter once we started to shout called an audible and walked. the only option was out couch surfing for a theta wave to throw me a sign from an era where GD stands for growth & decline my city is a battlefield for soldiers to die i've seen their moms' smile when those diplomas arrived how their brows twisted tearful when they lowered the box speaking reassurance with my stomach in knots pandora holds a piece of mind i've opened a lot jotting thoughts even though my demons told me to stop optimism, realism, theologists agree that no matter what, it's all okay. it's only a dream i left a note on the fridge that should be reason enough to let this hate become a seasonal drug, read it and shrug read it or weep. follow the sheep, i am leader of goats making hall of fame worthy look like decent at most focus and you'll understand. believe it or don't there is no good - only absence of the evil in folks breathe into your center. let the chemicals float soak inside the hologram and breathe into smoke people are so terrified. it's really a joke remember. no, anticipate. amnesia, she wrote deadman
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12-26-2013, 01:34 AM | #2 |
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12-26-2013, 01:36 AM | #3 |
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i want to read this more. good one.
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12-26-2013, 01:37 AM | #4 |
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trill talk = 9.17/10
Ali abawa...nigga brought out the aladdin shit...mind blown genies and shit, absence of evil was dope beginning was cool a little enlightening, a little sad, a little surprising u r life itself |
12-26-2013, 02:07 AM | #5 |
rhyme capsule.
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this reminds me why i stopped reading your shit. on the real. i thought it was flames, though. might expound on that but i wouldn't promise to.
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Wait. Are you black?
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12-26-2013, 03:13 AM | #7 |
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she wrote, she wrote, she wrote lol
whoever SHE is > deadman
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12-26-2013, 03:54 AM | #8 |
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lol I mean the young lad is a whippersnapper the testosterone fueled ego barbs will take their natural course. If people like oatmeal wouldn't gush over the precocious blacketh's material like princess jasmine witnessing aladdin's arabian dick size we wouldn't have a problem but like dallas and cristian say he's glorified too much. In my estimation black and vulgar are the best OM writers currently j not by the miles people make it out to be. Leave the lad alone Nasty Mas...
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12-26-2013, 04:14 AM | #9 |
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hahahahaha
i heard that movie was an instant classic - dope name brah black has all the respect in the world from me. I could drop my top twenty verses and black got a spot in my top 5. anything he does now is just sprinkles. black sprinkles
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12-27-2013, 08:58 AM | #10 |
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12-27-2013, 09:05 AM | #11 |
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Awesome. Felt it the whole way.
For me it heated the fuck up the 2nd half. All fire. Natural being congrats on the rape, I see.. Looking forward to what you unveil next!
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Dope shit dead. Silky smooth flow as usual. Loved the habit as well/ drag me to hell bit as well as the soldier part
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Many thanks fellows
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i want to hear a deadman audio more than anyone else from this site right now. so smooth. excellent piece
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like genocide said, youre one of the only cats on here that i want to hear some audio from. every drop, the vocabulary is astounding and it actually makes sense and is fluid enough for me to read outloud and find the flow.
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Geno I like your recent tracks. I hope you keep at it.
Thanks freek. You seem like a good guy who is overlooked here. I'll check out some of your work when I get a chance.
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Another good read from a great writer, one that pieces in comfortably with almost everything you have written here since I joined this site.
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Maybe after you win this tournament we can collaborate.
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god fucking dammit this was good.
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pandora holds a piece of mind i've opened a lot
I would love to break down the whole piece like others before me but this line alone is something that really does it for me... your flow is still unmatched in all the years that have passed but you dont need any reinsurance so cancel the Aflac
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The best thing about reading old work like this, personally, is to be able to pick out individual portions that make me remember my life at the time it was written.
Every word is like an item in a capsule. Thanks for upping this split. Hope you're doing well.
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