Aztec Lazer Tag (Vulg and oXus)

[Split]

only dissecting the last two a bit because of time restraints. sorry.



These ancient relics... have been ensconced in mist for centuries
Does the concept of Godsend apply to polytheistic entities?
>illy


Emerald dresses bless a dark fertile crescent - sequins were pale
A child's knuckles rap against the wood to hear the demon's detail,
>really excellent imagery, and also fresh vocab. not too stilted.




Rain produced Hagakure-born ninjas with attributes of Stormbringer
& absolute laws hinder none as the blast of an Oliphant horn lingers.
>cooool

It’s Aztec Lazer Tag, Coatlicue compresses tablets made of hash
smoked through the pied pipe(r), biting sound hoping the brigade will track
or a phrase can catch as the phases pass; it’s all sacred math:
the maxim’s proof -- though I’m sure I’ll make my Master, soon.
Good afternoon. Iwamatsu spat fire… so I exhale naphtha fumes.
>firefirefire


Traded my pen nib’s edge from a Muramasa to a Masamune,
I had the view as Metztli coughed up a blackened moon
& the Crimson King lifts soul from body as if there’s Rapture due.
I’m past attuned, penny-rent penitent, bramble vest fabric I wear
…commuting to the front lines everyday amidst a vanity fair.
>killer. loved the flow of consonant and vowel sounds in the second to last lines... i dont even know what mix of devices it technically is, it just sounds very satisfying.



overall it was a really dope concept, lots of room for creativity but still leashed to a set of ideas/ concepts. i think oXus really worked well with Vulgar's style here, but perhaps he didn't bring enough panache to the table to really stand toe-to-toe with Vulgar.

Some funny bits as well. subtlety! shabat lol.

Lyrically near flawless by both. Incredible use of references. I wish that was my steez but I'd have to research for mad long to be able to write something that like approached this. Might try it someday to see what it's like.


A little dense in spots. Vulgar has most of us used to that. But still, I can't appreciate the majority of these concepts because I stay in context when on my phone/ tablet (all i have time for these days )-: )


dope drop. made me want to write.

keep keyin