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YD - I liked thhe final bar as well as the (a)pathetic concept. This was a very straight forward verse, not much depth though. Its all very face value and rather "list like" IMO. decent enough rhymes, but all in all, to me, there is no wow factor or one aspect of either scheme, story line or flow that just stand out.
Bruh- solid writting, and by solid I mean superb. Vastly above aerage as far as overrall flow, but also story pprogression. I liked the use of topic, and thought the touch of humor was, well, a good touch. I have mr. Pan taking the cake here....haha. simply out wrote his counter part IMO
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