Senny vs. Ryan 12 - Ryan Wins

[Neighbor]

NBL
Week 4

Due Tuesday, November 19th

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@Senny @Ryan 12

[Ryan 12]

who the fuck is senny

check

[Sentex]

I'm Senny.

12 lines... Yes?

[Ryan 12]

alright np @Senny

[Ryan 12]

need an ext

[Sentex]

yeah ext is cool?

I've got a verse.. I'll post tomorrow? @Neighbor

[Sentex]

I'll confront this lanky fuck straight up; shit, I'mma do it right here man
Whereas for you, sticking your neck out requires perseverance and a 5 year plan
Acting like a hot shot.. keeps blastin off at Aero but he's just blowin some smoke
Only goes by Billy the Kid... because his name is Billy and he'd be sonned by the goat
I've been in the winners pool; with more accolades than Michael has gotten
But this round I'll see Ryan Locht...... To a giant rock and sink to the bottom
This kid is my test? ya got it twisted if ya don't know I'll choke out this guy's best
I'll be looking like a Torticollis expert.... the way I got a stronghold on Wry neck
Kid didn't want to fuck with Chyna, but it's no disrespect to the Asian race
It's that: she looks like a man.... But not enough like Resin for his dating taste
Yeah, fuck his textual man-crush! he woulda ridden that dick to the grave
Now all his shit sounds sexually frustrated, and to this day his ass still ain't resin ate

[Ryan 12]

droppin soon

[Ryan 12]

Srs?..

You know this fake pussy slits wrists to the right..
Since his entire life is a License been seeking 1 to legally commit suicide
Fatass cuntflap could down a 100 gum wraps..
Way this fag attacks Oreo's would inspire Hush's comeback
You're into homosexually inclined men
^That ain't even Bull.. it's a fact you're actually Bisen
This desperate faggot's lonely..
Only time his dates 'end on a Hi note' is impersonating a dyslexic Karaoke
Our name's alone depict the end of his welfare..
When you see mine Ry's in the ranks you'll know I needed A-Sen-dead to get there
I laid down 5 bars of fire that'll rock ya defense..
And trust you'll be seeing dead ppl when I drop the Sixth, Sen's

[KwaL!ty]

Acting like a hot shot.. keeps blastin off at Aero but he's just blowin some smoke
Only goes by Billy the Kid... because his name is Billy and he'd be sonned by the goat
I've been in the winners pool; with more accolades than Michael has gotten
But this round I'll see Ryan Locht...... To a giant rock and sink to the bottom
This kid is my test? ya got it twisted if ya don't know I'll choke out this guy's best
I'll be looking like a Torticollis expert.... the way I got a stronghold on Wry neck



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Fatass cuntflap could down a 100 gum wraps..
Way this fag attacks Oreo's would inspire Hush's comeback
You're into homosexually inclined men
^That ain't even Bull.. it's a fact you're actually Bisen
This desperate faggot's lonely..
Only time his dates 'end on a Hi note' is impersonating a dyslexic Karaoke
Our name's alone depict the end of his welfare..
When you see mine Ry's in the ranks you'll know I needed A-Sen-dead to get there
I laid down 5 bars of fire that'll rock ya defense..
And trust you'll be seeing dead ppl when I drop the Sixth, Sen's


this battle was mainly pretty decent the set up sucked ass & where pretty much all filler ... but Ryan had better overall concepts and smoother execution ...


Vote - Ryan 12

[Destroyer]

neck out, ryan locht

vs

bisen
edit: I didn't get bisen before. this one was decent

Jesus, I wanted to quote a bar or two from this dude just so he wouldn't say I was hate voting. but srs I can't do it. u had flow but nothing hit for me

I got senny

[Answer]

billy the kid, wry neck, resin. resinate line wouldve been alright, but i feel like you did the same shit twice in a row

vs

oreos maybe...I've seen a lot of bison lines in my life.

senny's flow could be smoother, ry's wordplay could've been cleaner. Overall, Sen just had less misses

MVGT - Sen

[Unfukwitable]

Acting like a hot shot.. keeps blastin off at Aero but he's just blowin some smoke
Only goes by Billy the Kid... because his name is Billy and he'd be sonned by the goat
I've been in the winners pool; with more accolades than Michael has gotten
But this round I'll see Ryan Locht...... To a giant rock and sink to the bottom
This kid is my test? ya got it twisted if ya don't know I'll choke out this guy's best
I'll be looking like a Torticollis expert.... the way I got a stronghold on Wry neck


You're into homosexually inclined men
^That ain't even Bull.. it's a fact you're actually Bisen
This desperate faggot's lonely..
Only time his dates 'end on a Hi note' is impersonating a dyslexic Karaoke
Our name's alone depict the end of his welfare..
When you see mine Ry's in the ranks you'll know I needed A-Sen-dead to get there

I felt both had good drops one had a slightly more consistant verse than the other though had some good connecting word play but I felt both had some Iffy wording In some areas also the one that edged it just was a tad sharper to me with the concepts/executiong than the other . v/R12

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sen

opener, ryan lochdt, and chyna


vs



ryan


hi note, bisen (barely)


v/senny....ryan had good concepts I just was feeling his execution it seemed careless like the license line I like it but not the execution senny was solid execution wise

[King Ra.]

@Senny, opener was solid. I liked the punch though, it's one of those lines directed at your opponent but could be directed at any opponent. But for an opener, it's a good start. Second bar is a nice nameplay shot and personal. The repeat of Billy twice in that punch line though makes it come off weird though. Had to re-read to catch that transition but it works well enough. Third bar was another cool nameplay. Punch was okay, could've hit harder. Fourth bar, I see what you did here. The Torticollis/wry neck concept was fresh, I give you kudos on that, but the wording of this bar from the set up to the punch takes from it's effectiveness. Didn't too much like how the set up was worded, actually. So this bar, I'd say is your best thus far on the premise that the punch line with the word-nameplay connection was nice. Fifth bar, was okay. That's all really. The punch didn't really hit for me. Your closer, also missed, imo. Not only that, you used the "Resin" thing in back-to-back bars, so that takes from it, but either way, the closer doesn't connect punch wise because of the wording.



@Ryan12, your opener is damn. I like it a lot. Simple set up, but very effective punch and I like the way you managed to word it & I had to re-read to really grasp the transition of the wordplay to the punch, but that was a heavy hit right. Second bar, I'm feeling the punch again, not as strong as your opener though. The set up here was weird, but the punch makes up for it. Third bar, nice nameplay connection here. And here the set up led into that punch, so I'd have to say this is your most complete bar thus far. Fourth bar reads like your second bar bar somewhat. Weird set up but the punch here is, once again, very solid. I'm feeling your punches so far. Fifth bar, you missed here. This could have worked but that "a-sen-dead" play didn't work well here. The wording on your punch line is messy so you missed out on a good connection here. I've read it a couple times, just needs to be worded better. Closer is also a miss. Mainly because the "Sixth Sen's/Sense" does not work nor makes sense. Probably needed to re-word that differently.


While Senny had more wording than Ryan here, I feel Ryan packed some serious punches in his first four bars that really separated him from his opponent. Senny didn't have enough hits here as I feel he missed out on some chances to deliver. Despie Ryan's weird set ups (had only like two of those) and less words, they counted most in his punch lines and connected despte falling out in his last two bars. So for me, the winner is clear.


MVGT: Ryan12. Good job by both competitors.

[Sharp]

(Acting like a hot shot.. keeps blastin off at Aero but he's just blowin some smoke
Only goes by Billy the Kid... because his name is Billy and he'd be sonned by the goat)
I've been in the winners pool; with more accolades than Michael has gotten
But this round I'll see Ryan Locht...... To a giant rock and sink to the bottom




You know this fake pussy slits wrists to the right..
Since his entire life is a License been seeking 1 to legally commit suicide
(Fatass cuntflap could down a 100 gum wraps..
Way this fag attacks Oreo's would inspire Hush's comeback)
You're into homosexually inclined men
^That ain't even Bull.. it's a fact you're actually Bisen


alright battle. senny only really had the nameflips, and I didnt really like wry neck even though it worked. Billy the kid had awkward wording, but was about as effective as the oreo line. wasn't a huge fan of either tbh. It just came down to me liking ryan's nameflips more

v/ryan

[Malachi]

Senny

goat , ryan locht, wry neck (was k i guess)

vs

Ryan12

dysleixc karaoke, a-sen-dead, closer, bisen

V/ Ryan 12, his was funnier

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Ryan wins 5-3