Week 7 - Mike Wrecka (2-4) vs. Zenland (2-4) - MIKE WRECKA WINS 7-1

timeless · 11-07-2013, 11:52 PM

It's an honest fact. Big bomb exact - ly. Reactions happen - nig with a flash of synapses collaps - ing on literal infractions it's a little its actual it's factual it's absolute fact. See, we're back and it's happening
Zen, I absolutely hate your structure. Shit, ive been off and on rap boards for nearly 15 years now and I've prolly vote against 95% of the people who displayed their verses in that frame. Its just so hard to keep a flow certain. Youre the exception, although a couple times I lost my pace and had to backtrack, it was all good because line for line it just kept getting better and better. I want to say this structure works for this type of writing, but I couldn't tell you. whatever works better for you I guess

Mike, I was feeling where the story was going until I just came to a complete stop at the end. Felt like it should've been anticipated a little more, you know? like where are they now? etc. Your rhyme scheme was basic, nothing really too intriguing or catchy. Line for line, you kept it pretty basic.

Vote = Zenland

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11-07-2013, 11:52 PM	#4
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	It's an honest fact. Big bomb exact - ly. Reactions happen - nig with a flash of synapses collaps - ing on literal infractions it's a little its actual it's factual it's absolute fact. See, we're back and it's happening Zen, I absolutely hate your structure. Shit, ive been off and on rap boards for nearly 15 years now and I've prolly vote against 95% of the people who displayed their verses in that frame. Its just so hard to keep a flow certain. Youre the exception, although a couple times I lost my pace and had to backtrack, it was all good because line for line it just kept getting better and better. I want to say this structure works for this type of writing, but I couldn't tell you. whatever works better for you I guess Mike, I was feeling where the story was going until I just came to a complete stop at the end. Felt like it should've been anticipated a little more, you know? like where are they now? etc. Your rhyme scheme was basic, nothing really too intriguing or catchy. Line for line, you kept it pretty basic. Vote = Zenland