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11-02-2013, 02:38 PM
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When other emcees see me their eyes fill with fear,
Listen up everyone, I'm not just another Poetry. I'm the modern day shakespeare, I see no reason for you 2 yell on the Microphone. Speaking out treason, now see your mind get blown, you are WaQ but seeing is believing seem like Mind controling. See your flows is debatable, Stop trying you not capable. you are unintelligent & you rhyme irrelevant, It's evident you have been negligent. I hope ya'll like it! |
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11-02-2013, 03:02 PM
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That Shakespeare line was fuckin ill.
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11-02-2013, 03:10 PM
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Thanks for reading.
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11-02-2013, 05:17 PM
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Robranda is Rudge1?
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11-02-2013, 06:51 PM
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Not bad. Keep practicing and you'll get better lines.
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11-02-2013, 07:04 PM
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thanks
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11-02-2013, 08:26 PM
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Keep practicing not bad.
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11-03-2013, 01:00 PM
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thanks love!
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11-04-2013, 10:59 AM
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LISTEN UP EVERYONE, I'M NOT JUST ANOTHER POETRY
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11-04-2013, 01:11 PM
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I think if you just took a little more time with what you wrote you would have solid bars. If you are just starting out it sounds pretty good. You just have to put everything you have into it, the best pieces come from your heart and soul put more thought into it.
For example "When other emcees see me their eyes fill with fear, Listen up everyone, I'm not just another Poetry. I'm the modern day shakespeare," here you could of said something like "Listen up everyone, I'm not just another smoe with average flow" Keep writing!
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11-04-2013, 01:44 PM
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This is actually not bad. Nice job homie
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11-04-2013, 01:51 PM
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That was your best drop. You get better every entry! Keep doing your thing, troll or no-troll.
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11-04-2013, 03:39 PM
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thanks for the feeedbacks!
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11-05-2013, 10:57 PM
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lmfaooo
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11-07-2013, 11:31 AM
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there was no real diss here .. nothing that went towards any body .. no direction no nothing special .. i guess good effort keep trying ...
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11-07-2013, 04:51 PM
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thanks love!
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11-07-2013, 06:47 PM
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Listen up everyone, I'm not just another Poetry.
Fire!
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11-07-2013, 07:17 PM
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robranda cant be real. I refuse to accept this as reality
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11-07-2013, 07:36 PM
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just fun diss, Anyways, Thanks for the feedback G!
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11-07-2013, 08:02 PM
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needs more this & that
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