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10-22-2013, 11:22 AM
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This was very fluent and fit the title well. I personally thought the rhyming scheme fit well, and that the rhyming scheme don't have to be amazing to make a piece worth reading.
This was my favorite part, because it is the reality for all of us. "Whatever it is I'm down in the dumps, but it could be worse I could be carried away in a hearse, forgotten, then burried in dirt"
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