In waves..

Darth Yoda · 10-20-2013, 09:04 PM

This was a cool, odd read. It read in spurts, but it was ok. As for the topic at hand, I know I'm not the greatest at posting topics and keeping on track (well, in my mind, I think I do, but to the reader they can't see what I mean to write in subtle metaphor). But this was cool, read well, decent mechanics and enjoyable throughout. Some things didn't completely make sense to me, I mean I could understand what you were conveying, - for the most part - I just think it wasn't worded carefully.

You teeter tottered from actually saying something in metaphor, to talking about how you write, and comparing them ever so often. Not sure what you were aiming for, but it was decent to me - enjoyable.

You seemed to adjust on being strange, cool.

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10-20-2013, 09:04 PM	#2
Darth Yoda Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 408 Battle Record: 6-2 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF Rep Power: 20182439	This was a cool, odd read. It read in spurts, but it was ok. As for the topic at hand, I know I'm not the greatest at posting topics and keeping on track (well, in my mind, I think I do, but to the reader they can't see what I mean to write in subtle metaphor). But this was cool, read well, decent mechanics and enjoyable throughout. Some things didn't completely make sense to me, I mean I could understand what you were conveying, - for the most part - I just think it wasn't worded carefully. You teeter tottered from actually saying something in metaphor, to talking about how you write, and comparing them ever so often. Not sure what you were aiming for, but it was decent to me - enjoyable. You seemed to adjust on being strange, cool.