WK1: c.d.m. (0-0) VS. dead man (0-0) [DEAD MAN WINS, 9-0.]

Split · 02-17-2013, 03:03 PM

i had a really nice breakdown i lost, im simply not motivated to go through it again.

Dead Man. lyrically superior, very solid interpretation of the picture that would work as a standalone piece as well. i pulled like ten lines of quotes out.

Veritas. amazing angle, the rhyming was actually pretty solid in spots and overally i didnt see your structure hurting you too much. unusual for a Vertias verse, i thought the metaphorical connection was rather weak, but the plot was very gripping, and the portuguese was a nice touch. it was fresh.

however, dead man's poetic style resulted in a more powerful verse, i connected to his nameless numberless protagonist much more

v/ dead man

02-17-2013, 03:03 PM	#18
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	i had a really nice breakdown i lost, im simply not motivated to go through it again. Dead Man. lyrically superior, very solid interpretation of the picture that would work as a standalone piece as well. i pulled like ten lines of quotes out. Veritas. amazing angle, the rhyming was actually pretty solid in spots and overally i didnt see your structure hurting you too much. unusual for a Vertias verse, i thought the metaphorical connection was rather weak, but the plot was very gripping, and the portuguese was a nice touch. it was fresh. however, dead man's poetic style resulted in a more powerful verse, i connected to his nameless numberless protagonist much more v/ dead man __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

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