Addiction

Angkor · 02-17-2013, 07:21 AM

first thing u wanna do is switch up ur signature. the shit's distracting as hell lol

on to the verse...

I liked this somewhat. Flow was carried mostly through multies and assonance. Lots of great lines scattered about and i like the Allegory of the Cave allusion. Although i'm a little lost on the actual content of the piece. The title's addiction and at first i thought the addiction was sex as it opened up with some kind of "player" swag. then it broke down into a more psychological dilemma. At this point, my thought was this was a lonely character who's aching for company and may be creating said company in his own mind. Either that or he's just a player who's addicted to sex. And did u mean "invested time" or was "infested" the intended usage? Despite issue with clarity, this was a pretty good read, i thought. word.

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02-17-2013, 07:21 AM	#3
Angkor Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 148 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 38	first thing u wanna do is switch up ur signature. the shit's distracting as hell lol on to the verse... I liked this somewhat. Flow was carried mostly through multies and assonance. Lots of great lines scattered about and i like the Allegory of the Cave allusion. Although i'm a little lost on the actual content of the piece. The title's addiction and at first i thought the addiction was sex as it opened up with some kind of "player" swag. then it broke down into a more psychological dilemma. At this point, my thought was this was a lonely character who's aching for company and may be creating said company in his own mind. Either that or he's just a player who's addicted to sex. And did u mean "invested time" or was "infested" the intended usage? Despite issue with clarity, this was a pretty good read, i thought. word.