WK1: Rawn MacDon (0-0) VS. Innovator (0-0) [INNOVATOR WINS, 6-2.]

Mike Wrecka · 02-14-2013, 05:03 PM

ok dope battle. ya this topic was definitely a good one. I think this shit is close as hell

Innovator- you spun a good tale about some immigrants on their way over here and their reaction upon arrival. the mechanics were definitely sound. but that middle section I wasn't in love with. u rhymed dancing with prancing, then rhythm to within us. the first set of rhymes in that section didn't do anything for me. the second seemed forced. I don't wanna dwell on the the two lines that I didn't like cause the rest were definitely knockin. good stuff. I enjoyed it.

Rawn - well I thought this verse was very dope. too short though. that being said the imagery and metaphorical take on the statue of liberty was sick. the vocabulary was insane. and the cadence is what pulled me in. it had the type of rhythm I greatly enjoy. good work.

overall its a very close match up. could go either way, but I personally enjoyed rawns more and felt that he slightly showed the more complex structure and verbiage.

vote- Rawn

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02-14-2013, 05:03 PM	#10
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,591 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779338	ok dope battle. ya this topic was definitely a good one. I think this shit is close as hell Innovator- you spun a good tale about some immigrants on their way over here and their reaction upon arrival. the mechanics were definitely sound. but that middle section I wasn't in love with. u rhymed dancing with prancing, then rhythm to within us. the first set of rhymes in that section didn't do anything for me. the second seemed forced. I don't wanna dwell on the the two lines that I didn't like cause the rest were definitely knockin. good stuff. I enjoyed it. Rawn - well I thought this verse was very dope. too short though. that being said the imagery and metaphorical take on the statue of liberty was sick. the vocabulary was insane. and the cadence is what pulled me in. it had the type of rhythm I greatly enjoy. good work. overall its a very close match up. could go either way, but I personally enjoyed rawns more and felt that he slightly showed the more complex structure and verbiage. vote- Rawn