Week 2 - Mr. J (1-0) vs. breathless (0-0) - MR. J WINS 9-4

Adonis · 10-06-2013, 05:55 PM

B - So i enjoyed the aspect of traditional topical, not a storyline just an oldschool topical. Although I wasn't a huge fan of the writing to be honest. There were a couple good lines, but for the most part I read it twice and will literally not remember a word that was said. Sorry.

J - Good flow, loved the flow and concept of the gym floor and soul searchin bar. Played the topic well and felt some emotion. Not your best work, but not horrible

V/ Mr. J with a slightly better flow and more emotion.

10-06-2013, 05:55 PM	#1
Adonis Tsk Tsk Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Beer Goggles Posts: 4,834 Battle Record: 36-34 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - NFL Pick'em 2016-17 Rep Power: 9946449	B - So i enjoyed the aspect of traditional topical, not a storyline just an oldschool topical. Although I wasn't a huge fan of the writing to be honest. There were a couple good lines, but for the most part I read it twice and will literally not remember a word that was said. Sorry. J - Good flow, loved the flow and concept of the gym floor and soul searchin bar. Played the topic well and felt some emotion. Not your best work, but not horrible V/ Mr. J with a slightly better flow and more emotion. __________________ I'm tryna fuck like A-don-is TUPAC SHAKUR

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