Week 2 - Mr. J (1-0) vs. breathless (0-0) - MR. J WINS 9-4

Zen · 10-04-2013, 02:09 PM

breathless- I thought this was a pretty good showing this week. I'm not sure if I'm just reading it wrong but the flow didn't come off as effortless to me as the others have described it. I think it might have been from some typo's like the being done line. That line really made no sense to me in that context. The strongest portion of your verse was the fourth section. Very nice there. Good job.
Mr. J- I felt your flow had no problems at all and the shit came off effortlessly forreal. It was a short piece but it was straight to the point and got straight to the point. It was nice. Nice multi's and a great flow made this a nice read.

V/ Mr. J

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10-04-2013, 02:09 PM	#1
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	breathless- I thought this was a pretty good showing this week. I'm not sure if I'm just reading it wrong but the flow didn't come off as effortless to me as the others have described it. I think it might have been from some typo's like the being done line. That line really made no sense to me in that context. The strongest portion of your verse was the fourth section. Very nice there. Good job. Mr. J- I felt your flow had no problems at all and the shit came off effortlessly forreal. It was a short piece but it was straight to the point and got straight to the point. It was nice. Nice multi's and a great flow made this a nice read. V/ Mr. J