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10-01-2013, 12:17 PM
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I enjoyed reading this.
That was actually a pretty cool progression with your story .great imagery really dope storytelling all around..maybe put some More details into his training and why his dad chose that path...other Than that I have no complaints....if you dp this right it will be dope. Looking for chapt 2 |
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