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Old 02-09-2013, 09:28 PM   #1
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Wanted to go farther with this but no one wanted to collab :(....anyways didnt wanna waste what i got so check it...

Hellish demons with selfish reasons released to lurk the streets
In search of rap relics unspoken unless worded over a perfect beat
The earths in danger as a perfect stranger arrives cloaked in black
Armed with nothing more than a mic and what’s left of a broken bat
Alleyways provide cover his pride smothers any thought of weakness
Secretly trained by the Gods so he’s ready to shadow box with demons
The Hero reveals himself no shielded stealth n everything to fight for
He likes war, blood stains remain from past enemies on his mic chord
The son of death approaches, with unaffected focus he squares his feet
On sacred ground, were challengers of the past have fallen, buried deep
He draws a blade with paws of rage always noticed for his heroic actions
Throwin slashes with a sword heated and formed by the throat of dragons
Plugged into his mic jack he fights back, words alone can destroy the demons
He deploys his freedom of speech and defeats em with the voice of reason



btw I repllyd to some shit when i was supposed to collab but i dont have ne idea what it was....lemme know if u need more links
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Old 02-10-2013, 12:39 AM   #2
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shame, i dug this and could've done with more. Liked the heavily imagery-driven approach you took, really brought out some nice moments. That, paired with some nicely rhymed/flowing parts created a really nice drop.

This section really brings out pretty much everything I thought you did well.


The earths in danger as a perfect stranger arrives cloaked in black
Armed with nothing more than a mic and what’s left of a broken bat
Alleyways provide cover his pride smothers any thought of weakness
Secretly trained by the Gods so he’s ready to shadow box with demons
The Hero reveals himself no shielded stealth n everything to fight for
He likes war, blood stains remain from past enemies on his mic chord


Never saw an OM from you, definitely keep it up.
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Old 02-11-2013, 03:09 PM   #3
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Pretty nice drop Sik. I really dug the inner rhymes you had laid in throughout to keep the flow going. All in all a dope ass drop keep postin in the OM fam. I'll definatly peep your pieces from now on.
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Old 02-12-2013, 09:27 PM   #4
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I like the imagery a lot. This topic/storyline you were following had strong potential for a collab. The verse leaves me wanting more, but hey, what can you do. The structure is odd to me, but I'll accept as a personal problem/preference. The wording here was great, very clear and concise, perfect for a storyline. All in all, i enjoy the piece. I'll add my favorite line(s) riiiiiiight here:

Plugged into his mic jack he fights back, words alone can destroy the demons He deploys his freedom of speech and defeats em with the voice of reason
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Old 02-13-2013, 05:38 AM   #5
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Mate loved this drop and would of been perfect with the collab bit I wrote but again couldn't find any one to collab with....Where were you at!!!!

Anyways I will give better feed if I get time later but a highlight for me was -
The Hero reveals himself no shielded stealth n everything to fight for
He likes war, blood stains remain from past enemies on his mic chord

Loved the mic chord - fight for rhyme, nice thinking. Also nice multis throughout. reveals himself - Sheielded Stealth
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Old 05-24-2013, 08:20 PM   #7
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Dope piece man.. good to see your name back around a bit more. Hopefully you get active again. This shit had it all mechanically with some raw ass lines/concepts. Ill
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Old 05-26-2013, 03:37 PM   #9
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He draws a blade with paws of rage always noticed for his heroic actions
Throwin slashes with a sword heated and formed by the throat of dragons
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this was sick, literally


I'm diggin the internals you got going on
makes me miss that style, nice piece all around though
if I knew you were collabing I woulda threw down
heh...

either way nice drop my dude, keep it up
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