WK1: Coup (0-0) VS. ZenLand (0-0) [ZENLAND WINS, 7-0.]

Nigma · 02-12-2013, 06:50 PM

Hello friends.

Coup - You seemed to play it safe in terms of rhyme scheme, was sort of simplistic but you at the same time you had your own unique twist to it. There were portions of the verse that were correlating nicely with the picture and other parts where you strayed away from it a bit. In terms of depicting the picture, I feel the second stanza was the strongest, however picture aside my favourite portion was the last stanza, especially the zenith sun line.

Zen - I felt you clearly had the more elaborate rhyme scheme here. Content was pretty bumping as well. The imagery you used meshed very well with the picture and your abstract conceptual idea here made it a very enjoyable read.

Both had a good week one showing but here can only be one Highlander
Voting Zen

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02-12-2013, 06:50 PM	#9
Nigma The COAT... Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: BC, Canada Posts: 1,723 Battle Record: 28-20 Champed - Art of Writing League (x3) Rep Power: 4595813	Hello friends. Coup - You seemed to play it safe in terms of rhyme scheme, was sort of simplistic but you at the same time you had your own unique twist to it. There were portions of the verse that were correlating nicely with the picture and other parts where you strayed away from it a bit. In terms of depicting the picture, I feel the second stanza was the strongest, however picture aside my favourite portion was the last stanza, especially the zenith sun line. Zen - I felt you clearly had the more elaborate rhyme scheme here. Content was pretty bumping as well. The imagery you used meshed very well with the picture and your abstract conceptual idea here made it a very enjoyable read. Both had a good week one showing but here can only be one Highlander Voting Zen