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Old 02-07-2013, 07:46 PM   #1
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This reminds of me of The Antlers - Epilogue. Not only do you not know that reference, or care, but it's funny because I relate everything to that band! LMFAO HOW FUCKING FUNNY

Anyhoo

This was coolio, in my book. I've been writing depressed-omg-im-a-martyr pieces lately and I fancy this clever. The only line I didn't cream my stockings over was the the 'fate was shone' thingamagoo. If only because you went with the tact of similar length lines and it was abrupt and seemed simple in comparison. Palindrome, although I'm sure written before in the entire history of human writing, was pretty and I liked it and warmed my cockles. The 'didn't share with you'/'splitting hairs with you' was the best couplet in the whole kit and kaboodle. Really personal, well worded. Bully for you. Parachute was cute. The ending tied everything in well. Not every single piece needs to be BOOM BOW SURPRISE, NUCCA WUT. This was just a tidy tightly wound message with a point, and you wrote it well.

God bless...adieu!
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